So, I write. One story I've been working on lately has some Esperanto dialogue towards the end, and I was hoping you could help me double-check things, since I'm always second-guessing myself.

Backstory (may not be necessary):
The last human on earth (Simon) is raised by an android (Nina) until one day, a girl (Aya) shows up. They leave the tower where they'd been staying (safe from the dangerous wildlife, ktp) and follow Aya to where she is leading them. In the course of the journey, Nina is destroyed in an effort to save the children. Simon recovers her memory core and years later (after reaching the village that Aya comes from)he reconstructs a body for Nina out of scavenged parts.
Aya and her people have exotic hair and eye colours and don't share humanity's "Mitochondrial Eve" link, they also have no language.
After Simon joins them, he teaches them Esperanto using books that Nina had salvaged.

Here's the dialogue itself (The section is preserved in its entirety for context. Esperanto dialogue is bolded, the link is to a Google Document because of character limits on this board.)

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Thank you for your consideration,
Vespero.

I just left some comments (and hope they show up, I've never used gdocs before).
Please ask here if you think I didn't get it right.

Kirilo81:I just left some comments (and hope they show up, I've never used gdocs before).
Please ask here if you think I didn't get it right.

Thanks, your comments showed up fine. I have read them and posted responses/explanations/fixes.

Forigite

Hyperboreus:I added some comments, too.

I have read them and responded,

Thank you very much!

Forigite

Hyperboreus:

Vespero_:

Hyperboreus:I added some comments, too.

I have read them and responded,

Thank you very much!

I responded, too.

You've been quite helpful! (Note, words contained in < > are words that will be removed, but remain to preserve the comments.)