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Translation Help Needed ASAP!

fra SPX,2012 10 19

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Språk: English

SPX (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 19 22:26:32

So I need some translation help on something. These are going to sound strange, but they're for a project I'm doing for a film class, so just roll with it, ha ha. I need these by the end of the night so quick responses will definitely be appreciated.

#1

4:00

A hotel. Or at least at one time.

No need to check-in. Just come to the top.

#2

5:15

Take a moment to remember the past. And the scenery's nice, too.

While you're there, have a little faith.

#3

6:00

Many blocks down, just a few more to go.

Consider heading south and enjoy a stroll by a city's creek.

SPX (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 20 16:03:15

C'mon, 111 views and no one knows how to translate this stuff?

I'd do it myself but I need it to be right.

whysea (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 20 18:32:26

A hotel. Or at least at one time.

Hotelo. Aŭ almenaŭ iame.

No need to check-in. Just come to the top.

Ensaluti ne endas. Nur venu al la supro.

Take a moment to remember the past. And the scenery's nice, too.

Prenu momenton por memori la estinton. Kaj la pejzaĝo agrablas, ankaŭ.

While you're there, have a little faith.

Kiam vi estas tie, havu iom da fido.

Many blocks down, just a few more to go.

Multe da stratoj preterpasita, nur kelkaj plu.

Consider heading south and enjoy a stroll by a city's creek.

Konsideru sudeniri kaj ĝuu promenadon apud urba rojo.

-- A couple of those were a little awkward to translate, but hopefully these get the idea across well enough (corrections welcome). I don't know how to say "check in" or "blocks" so I said "log in" and "streets". And I am not totally sure if "konsideri" is the same as English "to consider".

J_Marc (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 21 00:12:05

Hi SPX. You will find whatever project you are doing this for to be a lot more fun and rewarding if you translate these words yourself. I speak as a creative person who has done this kind of thing. Why not use English? Is the goal to be less understandable to yourself or your readers? (It has been one of my goals in my various creative endeavours, is why I ask.)

4:00
-- La 16a horo.

A hotel. Or at least at one time.
-- Jen hotelo, estanta aŭ estinta.

No need to check-in. Just come to the top.
-- Oni ne devas registriĝi. Simple iru al la supra etaĝo.

5:15
-- La 17a kaj 15.

Take a moment to remember the past. And the scenery's nice, too.
-- Bonvolu memorigi vian estintecon momente, kaj rigardi la bonaspektan pejzaĝon.

While you're there, have a little faith.
-- Dum vi restas tie, fidu, mi petas.

6:00
-- La 18a horo.

Many blocks down, just a few more to go.
-- Trans multaj stratoj vi jam iris. Nur malmultaj stratoj restas antaŭ vi.

Consider heading south and enjoy a stroll by a city's creek.
-- Laŭvole, iru sude por promeni laŭ la urba rojo.

Whysea, re your translation of 'And the scenery's nice, too,' check ReVo on the use of 'ankaŭ': "Ankaŭ devas ĉiam esti metata senpere antaŭ la vorto, kiun oni volas emfazi." (i.e., put it in front of a word. Putting it at the end like that is an anglicism.)

'Iru' not 'venu' in line 3, because in line 6 the use of 'there' shows that the narrator or whoever is saying these words is not at the top of the hotel himself.

erinja (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 21 02:17:20

FYI "iame" doesn't make that much sense. -am correlatives can act naturally as either adverbs or nouns, so it is never necessary or correct to add -e to an -am correlative.

Hyperboreus (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 21 04:27:21

Forigite

hebda999 (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 21 06:32:25

Hyperboreus:The tekstaro finds 27 occurrences of "iameW".
When are -am correlatives nouns (genuine question)?
In Poland we say:

Uderz pięścią w stół, a nożyce się odezwą...
Frapu perpugne la tablon kaj la tondilo resonos...
Hit the table with your fist and the scissors will answer...

Nice, isn't it...ridulo.gif

Hyperboreus (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 21 07:09:40

Forigite

darkweasel (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 21 07:35:23

erinja:FYI "iame" doesn't make that much sense. -am correlatives can act naturally as either adverbs or nouns, so it is never necessary or correct to add -e to an -am correlative.
Not necessary - true.
Not correct - I doubt that, you can also say "nune", one Lingva Respondo even mentioned "tiele", and so on. I think there is even a PMEG section about this somewhere but I can't easily look it up here on my smartphone.

tommjames (Å vise profilen) 2012 10 21 09:34:55

Yes, though somewhat uncommon it is possible to tack -e onto roots that are already adverbial in order to give a more generalised meaning. Nune, plie, plue, hodiaŭe and tiele are some examples I've come across.

I see no reason correlatives should be excluded from that. Though I must admit the sense of "iame" eludes me a bit on first reading. In the above translation I doubt it's necessary.

By the way PIV has the following Zamenhofian quotes for "tiele": kredu al mi, tiele estas pli bone! Z; li direktis konsternitan rigardon al la tero k longe staris tiele Z

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